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As the froth of nectar


that waters the pond of dreams;


you sputter


In your embrace


I bloom


as Lilly blossoms.





As snow's soft flakes,


you melt on my petal cheeks


touching me


not quite.





Memories' butterfly kisses


turn into love letters


before my interlaced eyelashes --





--written amongst


changing cloud patterns


in our long forgotten


secret scripts





And I wishfully think








Is the rhythm in honey dew drips


upon window sill;


the tunes of my love for you?

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the imagry in this poem is amazing!!!!! wonderfully written a wonderful work of art. nicely written.
Reply:i like it, but 1 thing. "as Lilly blossoms" should be taken out. it interupts the flow of the words. other than that, its really good.
Reply:Beautiful, sweet, sensual. Maybe more intensity is needed.